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A Tale Of Two Spooks (Part 1)
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I've only read some of this as of now, but I definitely plan to do a full review/edit.
So far, I have an important comment. When it comes to character description: less is more. When you describe a character too much, it reads as though you're trying too hard to guide the reader to your vision of the story, rather than letting them make their own.
Don't get me wrong, not all description is bad. Setting descriptions are critical to setting the mood, creating the atmosphere, and building the world. Those are the types of details you really need to focus on.
Generally, it's best to leave out any character descriptions that aren't absolutely necessary to either the story itself or the context of a certain part of the story.
Examples: Harry Potter's scar. The Baratheons' dark hair and the Lannisters' blonde hair. Giving a tidbit about armor color/style, hair color/style, eye color, etc. only during a moment where the characters might be describing those things themselves or the narrator would necessarily have to describe those things to the reader for them to fully understand the passage.
Alternately, if you really want to give a lot of description to a character, it's better to spread it out. Small descriptions that are few and far apart are much better than a huge list of adjectives spread over a few paragraphs. When done in that way, they're not nearly as overwhelming. They don't make the reader feel like the author is forcing a vision of this character onto him or her.
I'll keep reading and I'll give a full review/edit once I've finished.
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